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1Solomon Moon (rEADY FOR rEVIEW) Empty Solomon Moon (rEADY FOR rEVIEW) Tue May 10, 2016 11:14 pm

Solomon Moon

Solomon Moon
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Solomon Moon (rEADY FOR rEVIEW) F3b5d302-b169-4623-a22c-97307651761e

Basic info
Name: Solomon-Daton Moon
Age: 18
Birthday: September 5th
Gender: Cisgender Male
Race: Human
Height: 5'11"
Weight: 180LBS Without Prosthesis, 205 LBS With Prosthesis
Face Claim: Captain Haar, Fire Emblem

Stats
STR:4
DEF:2
RES:2
SPT:4
Aura 200|100 HP

Personality
Major: Combat
Likes: Fighting, Cigars, Whiskey, Snow, Dogs, Poetry, Fine Arts, Swordplay, Heavy Metal Music, Classical Music, Fire, Conventionally attractive women,
Dislikes: Hugs, Enclosed spaces, Being surrounded, Load/Sudden noises, Fools, Weaklings, Victims, Country Music, Beer, Cigarettes, The ocean, Swimming, His prosthetic arm, People standing in his blindspot, Being reminded that he, has only one eye/has only one arm/is an orphan,
Fears: Blindness, Dismemberment, Drowning, Being Ambushed, Death
Overall Personality:

Known far and wide for an infamously incendiary temper, Sol has been well documented to smolder for hours before eventually erupting into a violent fury for what seems to be little reason at all. His penchant for holding a grudge, being incredibly and ruthlessly judgmental of others, and having little patience for fools or weaklings, have given Sol a reputation as a scowling hardass. Add to this the sense of loss he feels for both his eye, his arm, and his family, and you get a volatile man with few reasons to be anything but.

However, this tough exterior, that many fail to ever penetrate, belies a far more complicated individual. Skilled with both his hands and his weapons, Sol feels a great appreciation for the rewards of hard work, and finds a great deal of confidence and pride in both his crafts and his martial prowess. His hobbies include poetry, charcoal rubbings, mechanics and martial arts, and though he finds varied degrees of success in each, the metric skewed in favor of the latter pair, he is never the less driven and enthusiastic about such exploits. He possesses a stubborn will, and in combination with his ample courage in tackling obstacles is well noted to be the first one to challenge a conflict and the last to retreat.

Sol is a lover of the more basic things in life, and enjoys drinking, and smoking, and chasing pretty women, taking advantage of these things with the knowledge that he may never have another chance. Sol approaches most situations, aside from those that trigger his temper, with a tempered stoicism that can give the illusion of disinterest or apathy, but actually he just tends to conceal his emotions, and even represses them to a degree. Ironically it is during combat when he is able to be the most open, in part because of not knowing if he will survive, and also because his semblance is connected to his outward emotions and thus cannot function without a certain degree of transparency.

Those that penetrate this facade, which are few given that most simply give up and consider him a two dimensional asshole, find that Sol is deeply cynical, and nihilistic in his outlooks on life, both clear scars from a turbulent upbringing and exposure to extreme traumas. Sol refers to death and suffering with an offhanded tone, as if they are not remarkable to him, which they are not, assuming that he can protect himself behind an emotional barrier or some sort of separation from having to truly consider it. When what lies beneath his hardened exterior is exposed, one will find that he is actually a lot more sensitive than he appears, but only in a relative sense, the same way some stones are softer than granite. The truth of the matter is that Sol is deeply troubled and disillusioned with concepts and ideals, such as bravery, duty, honor, and obligation to others, and the only way he maintains the stability he has is by latching on to these ideals and fortifying himself behind them, often to the detriment of making personal connections with others. Because his fragile mental state actually relies upon these cornerstones, he is resistant to questioning them, and will resist attempts of others to do so, often employing violence to silence any arguments.

Sol has a strong belief and respect for military and martial might. He does not believe in a higher or more noble purpose than the dedicated pursuit of strength and power, to the degree that strength is often the metric by which he determines right and wrong. To him the only path to peace is having a more terrible weapon than one`s enemies, and only absolute might can be capable of uniting a fractured society. Sol believes ends justify the means, and though his exact feelings regarding violence as a solution are somewhat complex, he does not see any better options available to him.

Abilities
Aura type: Spirit
Aura Color: Red decaying into blue
Semblance: Volatile Ignition:

Sol's semblance tends to suit his explosive temper. By carefully focusing and manipulating his aura, Sol can manifest projected explosions of heat and force from his extremities.

Sol can project said detonations from either his hand or his mouth, and they typically originate within a few inches of his body and are projected outwards and away from him like a shaped charge. Under ideal conditions Sol is not in any danger as a result of these bursts, but they are never the less potent weapons in their own right. The potency of these strikes can be controlled to a degree by Sol. A discharge of his semblance extends up to ten(10) feet from the origin point, and can be directed and controlled to a degree as to never pose a threat to him. The force of the burst dissipates the further the from the ignition point the target moves, until rendered inert at increased distances beyond the maximum range.

A discharge against mundane targets with no aura can buckle the armor plating of a military vehicle, smash ceramics and glass to dust, and potentially dismember soft targets.

Sol can use his semblance to augment the affects of dust based attacks. Examples of Semblance/Dust interactions are as follows.

Fire dust explosions gain a much more incendiary quality, boosting the maximum range by 100%. Kinetic forces of this discharge are minimal and lack the power to drive an average opponent away from the ignition point, while setting fire to combustibles and soft targets, and immediately incinerating delicate materials.

Water dust creates an endothermic blast, sucking available heat and energy out of the immediate area, but also halves the maximum range of the blast. Depending on the quality of dust used, there might be as little as a sheet of frost over the affected targets or a layer of solid ice.

Lightning dust creates an electrically and magnetically charged burst, and can disrupt electronics, stun biological beings, and though the magnetic forces are not significant enough to attract metal objects, they are enough to scramble unshielded circuitry.

Earth can be shaped into a brief barrier instead of a blast.

Though it has no real combat application except for possibly the purposes of intimidation, utilization of his semblance causes Sol's internal body temperature to spike upward and his eye to smolder like hot coal. It is not uncommon for his breath to become steam, or for liquids to sizzle when they come in contact with him and these cosmetic differences can sometimes serve as a warning for an impending detonation. This does provide him a slight resistance to extreme temperatures, but not enough to be considered superhuman.

Use of his semblance is physically strenuous to Sol, above and beyond the usual strain a semblance places on most hunters. Repeated discharges of his semblance can cause bruising and burning that slowly spreads away from the ignition point, and can over time render the limb useless, or cost him his voice. Sol needs to take a break between successive discharges in order to avoid this, but after a typical fight even one in which not a hand is laid upon him, his body will be sore and bruised, and burned around the face and hand from the use of his semblance. This is likely a result of enduring the shock-wave that his semblance causes.

Item 1:
Roar:

A moment of reckless grief claimed Sol's right arm, and He has since replaced it with a sophisticated prosthesis that serves most of the same functions of the original, and several more as well.
Said prosthesis exists in two distinct parts, a reinforced endoskeletal structure that closely resembles the bone and sinew of a normal arm only rendered in far tougher materials, and a removable exoskeletal shell that houses a dust deployment and containment system.

The internal structure functions as an arm without need of the external structure, but looks rather unsettling, being it's close resemblance to it's biological equivalent, and is made up of a similar material to conventional hunter weaponry, for this reason it is considerably tough, as it needs to be to suffer the abuse of it's function.

The external structure is removable, being that in order to properly armor the dust containment system, the "meat" of the prosthesis had to be constructed around it. This also means that the forearm of the prosthesis needs to be stripped in order to reload the system. This structure actually extends up and over the remaining portion of Sol's biological arm, and fastens to a set of implanted rivets in his right scapular. The structure itself resembles overlapping red plates of insect chitin, surrounding a semi-translucent blue interior, and has a decidedly more organic impression than a conventional prosthetic, likely due to personal preference on the part of the creator. The shell is made of a ceramic composite, in order to shed the weight that would have been necessary to achieve a similar shape with metal. The skeleton of the prosthesis is visible along the palm, fingertips and knuckles of the hand, being that it was more efficient to leave these area's unarmored and allow the hardy material of the internal structure to take the brunt of any abuse.

Other interesting features of this prosthesis is the addition of several vents arranged at the joints for the purposes of deploying dust. In order of size from largest to smallest are as follows, dorsal shoulder, six inches in diameter, right palm, four inches in diameter, and two on the medial and lateral sides of the elbow, each two inches in diameter.

By employing these vents and the dust contained within the internal housing, often fire or wind dust, Sol can either eject gouts of flame and explosive force from his arm, or by narrowing the aperture of said vents , augment his own mobility with the assistance of directed jets of force.

Roar affords Sol enhanced physical strength for hand to hand combat, allowing him to grip and strike with the forces of a hydraulic press, but the primary weapon system comes by way of the vent located in the palm, from which concentrated ejections of dust can be fired in either stream, projectile, or jet form, by manipulating the much more complicated aperture located therein. The elbow and shoulder vents working in tandem the main gun can operate as a sophisticated stabilization system by ejecting precise jets to counteract the recoil of discharging the primary weapon.

For the purposes of combat the projectile, stream, and jet settings are distinguished as follows.
Projectile mode fires a solid mass of ignited dust up to fifty feet. This projectile explodes on impact and inflicts splash damage over an area ten(10)feet in diameter. However due to lacking a solid casing, the projectile must travel a distance of ten feet in order to prime, and at close range is only capable of inflicting damage to a single target.
Stream mode ejects a narrow two-five(2-5) foot wide cone that can extend up to fifteen(15) feet, and Sol typically employs this mode when a target closes into the dead zone of his projectile mode.
Jet mode has little if any applications for direct damage and instead provides propulsion for enhancement of Sol's mobility, as well as allowing him to land melee strikes with greatly increased force.

The only major consideration need to be taken into account is heat buildup, and ammunition availability, though the weapon houses enough dust to discharge fifteen high caliber projectiles or sustain roughly five minutes of continuous burn before needing to be reloaded.

The arm is limited outside of combat situations in that it lack a the same sophistication of tactile sensation of a biological limb. Sol can "feel" when he is holding something and how much pressure he is exerting, as well as the position of his arm with an equal precision as he might enjoy for any other limb, and is aware when the various systems of the arm are damaged or disrupted, but otherwise cannot actually feel anything. This means he cannot perform most fine tasks that require tactile feedback, including writing, use of a scroll, use of most keyboards, and the preparation of foodstuffs, as well as many others. Sol is forced to perform functions of this nature with his left hand, and is understandably clumsy when doing so.

The metal of the arm's core and shell are treated with blue and red dust respectively, and the former is constantly subzero to the touch and capable of acting as a very efficient heat sink for the rest of the weapon system, while the latter is warm to the touch and tempered to withstand the extreme temperatures of channeling the weapon's various jets of flame.

Item 2:
Fire Dust and Tier 1 License
10 Uses

History and Sample
History:
RP Sample:



Last edited by OrigamiZergling on Wed May 11, 2016 11:35 pm; edited 6 times in total

2Solomon Moon (rEADY FOR rEVIEW) Empty Re: Solomon Moon (rEADY FOR rEVIEW) Wed May 11, 2016 10:09 pm

Jet Jeyson

Jet Jeyson
Hello!!

So first everything is fine except semblance and weapon. Armor is fine but I need it to be precised if it's magic armor or physical armor. Since you say it's from his liberal use of fire dust (we use elements, not color) then I'm assuming it's magic, but I'd rather you precise it.

Now for the semblance.
I remembered on the chat you saying that it was simply making explosions, which is fine, but what I read here is far more complexe and unfortunately, not acceptable.
We can't accept personnal rules for damage, it is standardised to either Buff of 2 points in one stat, or 1 damage per 1 aura spent for a maximum of 20. How you apply those rules is up to you, but on thing for sure, we don't accept self-sacrifice semblances, it's part of the banned semblance. So the danger part for the semblance isn't acceptable, and neither is the double damage on unsafe explosions and half damage on safe ones.
Please refer to the semblance rules here for more informations on it : http://www.rwbyrpg.com/t4-aura-and-semblance-rules

For the weapon.
It's actually mostly fine. The weapon, as I understand it, is the arm and if you hit with the arm it's melee damage with weapon damage, that's good. If you use the Dust inside to shoot it through the vents or the palm, it's Dust damage so modified by SPT instead of STR. It also uses Dust vials, which you can get at the shop, but you need a Dust liscence that comes with Dust as starting items. If you don't take Dust as starting item, you will need to get a tier 1 liscence which cost 10k XP.

The boosters and flight abilities also use Dust, and would also spend a vial in a fight. Granted, using a vial unlocks Dust uses for the whole post so you would be able to attack but if you use the booster for your punch, it will use a vial and you won't hit harder than normal, it would be a regular weapon damage attack, though RP speaking it would come at the enemy faster, so harder to avoid. It's a good creative use for it if you can spend the Dust.

Do remember that a weapon as only one form at the start. In this case, I consider the gauntlet the weapon. The Dust chambers, vents and palm shot is all only for Dust uses and would therefore not be considered a second form, so it's accepted.

Other than that, it looks fine. You do have a lot of description for those so I can't promise I didn't miss anything.

Thank you ^^

3Solomon Moon (rEADY FOR rEVIEW) Empty Re: Solomon Moon (rEADY FOR rEVIEW) Thu May 12, 2016 12:09 am

Jet Jeyson

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