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1Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 14, 2016 9:55 pm

KatyushaBby

KatyushaBby
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Basic info
Name: Topaz Monroe
Age: 18
Birthday: April 11th
Gender: Male
Race: Hyena Faunus
Height: 6'4"
Weight: 221lbs
Face Claim: Iwatooshi - Touken Ranbu

Stats
STR: 5
DEF: 3
RES: 3
SPT: 2
Aura 150|150 HP

Personality
Major: Combat
Likes: High Tempos, Physical Activity, Newspaper Comics
Dislikes: Long-winded Speakers, Quiet Folk, Sticky Things
Fears: Death by Natural Means, Killing on Accident, Being Held Back on
Overall Personality: "Overbearing" is perhaps the greatest word that can be used to describe Topaz. His persona is almost fitting of that of a bully, but it can be seen further that he wants people to be honest with themselves and others, and if you aren't shouting your opinions to the skies? You're lying to yourself, in Topaz's eyes. Even so, boredom comes easily to him, and sometimes actions do speak louder than words. Rarely found in one place for too long, his strength lies in spontaneity. In battle, he has earned a reputation as 'The Giggling One' -- do not mistake this for him enjoying such a thing. It is an uncontrollable nervous reaction, and typically spells fear of defeat on his end.

Abilities
Aura Type: Power.
Aura Color: Orange.
Semblance: Damage. Unnamed. Topaz's semblance is a ranged attack that allows him to fire a blast of poisonous liquid from his mouth, in a sickly green color. Range. 15 feet, short-ranged with a small arc or 5-foot spread. 1 to 1 Damage Ratio of SP spent, up to 20. Chance to cause Poison Status.
Item 1: Weapon. Sip o' Hemlock. A naginata with a seven foot shaft and two foot blade, the length and weight of this weapon allow Topaz to keep his enemies at reach and even polevault over them in close quarters. However, though he has plans, it is naught but a simple weapon and needs much more development to be up to his dream.
Item 2: Armor. A simple breastplate hidden within his many layers of clothing.

History and Sample
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Last edited by KatyushaBby on Thu Sep 22, 2016 7:56 pm; edited 4 times in total (Reason for editing : Updated for DoT Semb and Approval!)

2Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Sun Sep 18, 2016 7:14 pm

KatyushaBby

KatyushaBby
Bumpin'.

3Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Second Wed Sep 21, 2016 4:51 pm

KatyushaBby

KatyushaBby
Bump two!

4Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:05 pm

Lloyd Vanheim

Lloyd Vanheim
Hi i'll be grading your app

The only thing I see that would need change is about your semblance. For the damage over time to work, you'd need to precise that your semblance can poison somehow (like an emanation of gas coming from the acid) and you'd need to refer to the Status Effect for more detail about that. Also you can go to the max ratio of 1/1 up to 20, we don't reduce the damage if you wish to have an element/status ^^

So reword your semblance to add the poison details and you'll be good to go ^^

5Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:24 pm

KatyushaBby

KatyushaBby
How 'bout now?

6Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:46 pm

Lloyd Vanheim

Lloyd Vanheim
Not quite, you can't automatically poison someone, when you attack them there's a chance of poisoning. If your attack lands on your target, the target rolls a dice to determine if they are poisoned, which is explained in the status effect page

7Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:51 pm

KatyushaBby

KatyushaBby
From what I read, it's not explained there. But I'll take your word.

8Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:53 pm

KatyushaBby

KatyushaBby
Wait no that's because I'm an idiot. Sorry.

9Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 21, 2016 10:26 pm

Lloyd Vanheim

Lloyd Vanheim
You still need to change the description of your semblance though, rathe rthan "DoT, 5 damage per post" you should write "Chance to cause Poison Status"

10Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 21, 2016 10:28 pm

KatyushaBby

KatyushaBby
I will, when I get the chance. Mobile currently so the edit function isn't working right.

11Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Wed Sep 21, 2016 10:55 pm

Lloyd Vanheim

Lloyd Vanheim
I see, bump when changed then, you'll be ready to be approved after that ^^

12Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Thu Sep 22, 2016 7:56 pm

KatyushaBby

KatyushaBby
Final bump, hopefully!

13Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) Tue Sep 27, 2016 7:19 pm

Lloyd Vanheim

Lloyd Vanheim
Sorry for the long wait, I've been busy with life... >.<||| Approved ^^

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