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1Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Sat Mar 25, 2017 3:26 am

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Basic Info
Name: Azrael R. Arch
Age: 18
Birthday: August, 21
Gender: Male
Race: Faunus (Faunus traits: wolf-like fangs, and wolf tail)
Height: 5'11
Weight: 137 lbs
Face claim: OC

Stats
Strength: 2
Defence: 4
Resistance: 3
Spirit: 3
Aura 150 HP 150

Personality
Major: Specialized hunter (Combat based)
Likes: Reading, Nature, And Adventure
Dislikes: Large crowds, People touching his books, And Just People In General
Fears: Tight Places, Caves, And Deep Water (like oceans and stuff like that)
Talent: Climbing
Weakness: Social Interaction
Overall Personality: Azrael is a quiet person even around friends and family but will speak if the situation asks for it. He is a person others would say as being cold, distant, or say that he ignores mostly everyone who tries to interact with him. Azrael can be seen reading most of the time or if he's not reading he can be found in trees or other places that can be accessed by climbing. If he is forced to talk he will speak in a low voice almost like he's whispering. If someone points out that his voice is too low he will try to raise it but will go quiet if someone forces him to speak out loud.

Abilities
Aura Type: Recovery
Aura Color: Black
Semblance: Enhanced Healing (This semblance gives the user the ability to dull the pain of wounds and it can do the same for allies but it is contact based as in the user of the semblance has to have contact with the wound for the semblance to take effect)
Item 1: Scythe that has a thin sharp edge that gets alittle wider the closer it gets to the top, has a skull near the base of the blade with a spine connecting the skull and the blade to the lower hilt, and has a ring at the bottom of the hilt that looks like a sun (like this: https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/6f/08/57/6f0857113d71d787cb4327999280fdfe.jpg
Item 2: A black hoodie that is regular armour

History
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RP Example
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Last edited by Azrael Arch on Thu Mar 30, 2017 12:32 am; edited 9 times in total

2Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Mon Mar 27, 2017 6:35 am

Richard Lionheart

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Hey, welcome to the site ^^ Not 100% sure that this app is done but going to pop in just in case, in the future change the title to change finish or bump it to say it's finished if you are done. Regardless; the app is good but there are a few problems. First of all When it comes to FC it is the image or character you are basing your character's appearance of, seeing as you are using a generated original one you would just put "OC" or the like in there. Second, your stat points total to 14 when they should 12. Please fix this. Also, you do need to state your faunus trait next to your race as one is not obvious in the image you have used ^^

Next is an increase in description for your semblance based healing, is he simply regenerating his own biomass or is it like washing over damaged areas in soothing aura? Can he do it to other people? If so is it contact based or? These things do need answers ^^ Finally you do need to fit the spoilers onto your rp sample and history, though the wordcounts are fine. You're real close to done, mostly just some minor fixes, bump when done

3Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Mon Mar 27, 2017 12:40 pm

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okai thank you ^^ I'll fix that as soon as I can and what do you mean by spoilers?

4Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Mon Mar 27, 2017 1:37 pm

Richard Lionheart

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The spoiler tags that are used to house the rp sample and history, like you'll see on other applications. Just move what you've written into the boxes, on the toolbar with bold and such it's the notepad symbol with a warning sign on it. Just above the smiling face. Bump when done ^^

5Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Mon Mar 27, 2017 1:53 pm

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okai I think I did it but what is bump?

6Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Mon Mar 27, 2017 2:05 pm

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Bump is just replying to a post like this or any ooc post, you may have nothing to do or say so you'll just post bump to get people's attention. You did it right. Only thing I see wrong now is in the fixed semblance description,

"This semblance has the ability to dull the pain of wounds without self and it can do the same for allies but it is contact based as in the user of the semblance has to have contact with the wound for the semblance to take place"

The "Without self" is the bit that confuses me. I think you mean "This semblance allows him to dull his wounds and it can...etc" I may be wrong though. rephrase the "Without self" bit and bump ^^

7Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Mon Mar 27, 2017 6:55 pm

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ooooh okai sorry for this btw ^^ thank you for pointing this out and the "without self" was me forgetting to make sure I typed the semblance description right XD

8Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Tue Mar 28, 2017 4:09 am

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Oh oops, I forgot a last thing. My bad. I'm taking it you're meaning to make that hoodie your armour? if so you have to specify physical or dust resistant. Otherwise you do still need a second item. Bump when done ^^

9Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Tue Mar 28, 2017 11:23 am

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okai uhm...I got a decent idea for it =3

10Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Thu Mar 30, 2017 12:35 am

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BUMP

11Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Empty Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] Thu Mar 30, 2017 8:30 am

Richard Lionheart

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