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1Vanilla Evans(Complete) Empty Vanilla Evans(Complete) Thu Sep 21, 2017 3:37 pm

Vanilla Evans

Vanilla Evans
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Basic info
Name: Vanilla Evans
Age: 17
Birthday: 4/20
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 5'9"
Weight: 125lbs
Face Claim: Rean Schwarzer

Stats
STR: 5(6)
DEF: 2
RES: 2
SPT: 3
Aura 200|100 HP

Personality
Major: Combat
Likes: Fighting, Napping, Cooking
Dislikes: Grimm, Waking Up, Paperwork
Fears: Acrophobia(Heights), Bacillophobia(Microbes), Cynophobia(Dogs/Rabies)
Talent: Stealth
Weakness Musician
Overall Personality: Vanilla is a kind individual to those that know him, he is fairly quiet. To those that know him well, he is extremely lazy and doesn't want to do much outside of reading or napping. This however changes when combat situations arise. Vanilla turns serious and fairly energetic, some believe that he has a split personality, but nay, this is all one person. He is vicious and strikes silently without mercy. He prefers to end combat quickly, but relishes in it. He loves the dance of fighting, but is still fairly quiet throughout fighting. He does not believe in taunting the opponent, nor does he believe in hearing them out. All he sees is someone or something to defeat.


Abilities
Aura type: Power
Aura Color: Dark Purple
Semblance: Umbra Weld- Vanilla has the ability to manipulate the very shadows themselves. Vanilla can use this semblance to attack, defend, debuff, and utility. The form of this semblance takes the form of delving into the shadows themselves for spying, and creating constructs out of shadows.

Offense
Spikes: Vanilla exerts control over his own or the opponents' shadow(s) in order to generate spikes that erupt suddenly from the shadow in order to injure or attempt to injure the opponent.

Shuriken: Vanilla controls his shadow to create Shuriken he can launch or throw at the opponent.

Spheres: Vanilla controls his shadow to create spheres he can launch at the opponent.

Defense
Barriers: Exerting control over his own shadow, Vanilla is able to make the shadow erupt to form a barrier in between him and an attack to lessen the damage done to him.

Dummies: Exerting control over the shadows in his environment, Vanilla is able to create dummies of himself in order to attempt to fool opponents into attacking them instead of himself. The coloration of these dummies are still like that of shadows, however these were created to trick the less intelligent(Grimm, some people) into attacking these instead of Vanilla.

Debuff
Binding Tendrils(Speed): Controlling the shadow of his opponent, the user is able to control the shadow to create tendrils made out of shadow in order to bind the opponent's legs in an attempt to stop them or at the very least slow them down.

Utility
Shadow Diving: Creating a space within a shadow, Vanilla is able to dive into the shadow and stay there in order to recoup his stamina or spy upon someone. He can still be attacked by those that know he is within the shadow in question. When inside a mobile shadow, Vanilla cannot maintain this for long. Nor can he maintain this for long with a constantly changing light source.

Riding on top of Shadows: Creating a platform from his own shadow, Vanilla is able to use it to quicken his travel speed without exerting his physical limbs.

Item 1: Tachi-The blade is 31 inches long.(T1 weapon)
Item 2: Leather coat(T1 armor)

History and Sample
History:
RP Sample:



Last edited by Vanilla Evans on Fri Sep 22, 2017 4:06 pm; edited 5 times in total

2Vanilla Evans(Complete) Empty Re: Vanilla Evans(Complete) Thu Sep 21, 2017 7:11 pm

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Alright most of this is fine however your semblance most certainly needs more details in places. For starters you've talked about manipulating shadows but not actually making constructs out of them? You should specify that this is the form your manipulation takes. Without that specification it could be that you're just moving shadows on the ground bud ^^

While the simple things such as barriers and spikes make sense enough on their own without in-depth explanation you've stated "Power Armour" with no further explanation as to what that is well as mentioning a "Field of Darkness" and saying it can debuff without specifying what it is (I myself do not think it would be possible to debuff str or spt with shadow constructs , as vision does not account for damage, and suggest removing it but feel free to try describing it ^^)

You also need to describe how you dive into shadows, I would recommend changing this from a bullet list to a couple brief paragraphs bud ^^

3Vanilla Evans(Complete) Empty Re: Vanilla Evans(Complete) Thu Sep 21, 2017 7:47 pm

Vanilla Evans

Vanilla Evans
I think I fixed all of your concerns. If not, then I can change it more. I want to make this semblance work on the site, and if it's unworkable, I'll create something else for Vanilla.

4Vanilla Evans(Complete) Empty Re: Vanilla Evans(Complete) Fri Sep 22, 2017 10:12 am

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Alright ^^ that's a great bit better bud but there is just two more things, I thought the dummies were just an alternate form of "Barrier" listed however the use for fooling is confusing me a bit. They would still be shadow coloured, they wouldn't match your character's colouration. I guess at night that would make them more useful than in the daytime for this reason? Regardless please make the colouration clear ^^ And, I believe this is the last thing, is to remember our conversation on shadow diving in the discord ^^ I recommend adding a little phrasing to make it clear that, due to the movement of shadows, remaining hidden while in the shadow of a mobile object or person is difficult to maintain and pending the light source location cannot be done. Bump when done.

5Vanilla Evans(Complete) Empty Re: Vanilla Evans(Complete) Fri Sep 22, 2017 12:37 pm

Vanilla Evans

Vanilla Evans
The changes have been made

6Vanilla Evans(Complete) Empty Re: Vanilla Evans(Complete) Fri Sep 22, 2017 4:12 pm

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Approved

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